Thursday, April 2, 2009

Hypatia


I admire your intelligence,

I really do.


All your philosophy, and thought.

all your names.

I love to discuss them with you,

I love to play those mental games.


Oh, how your ideas

blind my minds eye.

I want to hear more

I really do.


And did I mention,

you're the most beautiful person I know.

Sorry, for going off topic,

as far as your ideas go.


But I can't help but notice,

your tender eyes,

and waving hair.

They are real to me,

even with my minimal vocabulary skill.

And your gentle hands

that turn the pages 

you read while you lie calmly

under the eclipsed sun.

I notice that too,

even though

I can't formulate the question

it's supposed to respond to.


I am juggling thoughts

or perhaps I'm rotating

minds.

Listening to Athena in your voice

and Aphrodite in your eyes.

Can I worship more than one Goddess?,

Or maybe I can just do one sacrifice.

I wonder how many pantheons I can call my place,

As my thoughts and visions grow to proportions

I've yet to learn to embrace.

 

I like to stick to your ideas

and your intellectual feats. 

Directing my attention 

to your novel claims

and accomplished tasks.

I hear what you ask,

I have an answer,

but I can't say it.

Because my planned explosion 

has just imploded

in the frontal cortex of my juggling brain.


If you would slow down

I would follow you 

to your windowless room.

And I'll look out through the

crack in the ceiling I just made.


And I'll also read some of your books

I know you are mentioned in quite a few.

I'l try to concentrate on what they say,

if I manage 

not to get distracted by you.

3 comments:

  1. very ambigous-love it

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  2. Okay, lemme do the comment here. Firstly, I love your title. It's meaningful, allusive, and just poetically pretty enough to avoid coming off as pretentious. I also love many of the lines, but I think the poem in general is too wordy.

    I would delete these lines:

    even with my minimal vocabulary skill.

    Or maybe I can just do one sacrifice.
    I wonder how many pantheons I can call my place,
    As my thoughts and visions grow to proportions
    I've yet to learn to embrace.
    (The Greek allusions are overdone.)

    I like to stick to your ideas
    and your intellectual feats.
    Directing my attention
    to your novel claims
    and accomplished tasks.
    (You've basically already said this.)

    I know you are mentioned in quite a few.

    The stanza I loved best is the one that starts with "If you would slow down..." I also LOVE the last line and the *eclipsed sun* image. And I really like the music in the words from "planned explosion... juggling brain," although I don't really understand what you're trying to say there.

    So this is my two cents worth. Feel free to accept it or ignore it.

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  3. "I am juggling thoughts
    or perhaps I'm rotating
    minds."
    Loved this line.

    Very good piece. I do wonder about the title. It gives away a lot and takes away some of the mystery and ambiguity. If you revise, consider changing the title and refer to Hypatia somewhere toward the end.

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